LE Tournament #2 ROUND TWO - sniperk -VS- ItzGravitation

raw-material_ahh
raw-material_ahh Members Posts: 555
edited April 2011 in Lyrical Executions
sniperk -VS- ItzGravitation
  • Check in by Tuesday, April 5, 2011 11:59 pm Eastern time.
  • Verses are due by Friday, April 7, 2011 11:59 pm Eastern time.
  • Voting will end on Sunday, April 9, 2011 11:59 pm Eastern time.
Rules
Mandatory 16 lines.
Only one round.
5 votes first wins or most votes wins when voting is over.
3 votes to 0 votes is a KO.
50 posts to vote unless you are participating in the tourney.
All votes MUST be explained well and no crew or hate votes.
NO FEEDING!!!
Take criticism like a man. Quit trying to vote sway and explain your bars. If you didn't like the votes you received in the last round, recognize how people vote and write better. Everyone has their own opinion. Use the Predictions/? Talking Thread to voice your opinions, not this battle thread. Lastly, caught biting will disqualify you. Good luck.
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  • sniperk
    sniperk Members Posts: 1,562 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
    Checkin' in.

    You can vote with all 10 of your aliases this round, ItzGravitation, you STILL won't beat me.
  • ItzGravitation
    ItzGravitation Members Posts: 7,205
    edited April 2011
    ? it, i'm checking in, ready to snipe the sniper
    lol
  • deaththreats
    deaththreats Members Posts: 1,602 ✭✭
    edited April 2011
    should be a good one....looking forward to the verses
  • sniperk
    sniperk Members Posts: 1,562 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
    Last battle I got a bye, now I'm battling bi-sexuals?
    Boom bye bye on this ? , I turn fruits into vegetables
    ? , I'll get extra-terrestrial, his whole style lacks GRAVITATIONAL..pull
    "Escape velocity" from your "black hole", how's that for educational?
    Fig Newton, I'm straight rapin' you, I got this tiger by the tail
    This same STANLEY always CUPping the nuts of a certain half-Jew from Rosedale
    But I have you shook like Jimmy Brooks, your ? style is SIMPlistic
    That wheelchair flow couldn't even sell wolf tickets at the Special Olympics
    Tiger blood? Tigga what? This fake Charlie Sheen should have DQ'ed
    ? snaps? Paula Abdul? Now this Dairy Queen is getting B-B-Q'ed
    "Straight Up" you getting "Knocked Out"... ? your checkers, this is checkmate
    I'm Bobby Fischer Against the World, you just a cancelled Czech, mate
    Or should I say a cancelled cheque, mate? NSF... insufficient flow
    Down for the count, cancel you account, mate and don't post here no mo'
    Cuz Sniper K's a "Survivor", no "Redemption" for Tony the Tiger
    I (eye) dug his GRRRRRRRRRRRRR-ave (grave), and bust "man GRAVY" on his cadaver

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  • sniperk
    sniperk Members Posts: 1,562 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
    Young-Ice wrote: »
    cadaver and tiger dont rhyme

    You are turning into the IC troll, little man.

    over 10,000 posts in less than a year... get some fresh air, ? .

    and I would explain complex rhyming patterns to you but you'll never get past Disciplined Insight...
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
    ver and ger do rhyme
    nice verse cant wait to see what itzgravitational comes with
    i dont get the eye/i thing though
  • sniperk
    sniperk Members Posts: 1,562 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
    ver and ger do rhyme
    nice verse cant wait to see what itzgravitational comes with
    i dont get the eye/i thing though

    the 3 rhymes: survivor (sir-vive-ER) / the tiger (the- tie- GER) / cadaver (ka- die- VER)

    now I know it is actually ka-DA-ver, but most people don't pronounce it that way in venacular talk

    Survivor is the name of the 80's band who wrote the song "Eye of the Tiger" from the Rocky soundtrack (Sylvester Stallone)

    Survivor Redemption (Island) is the reality tv show where people battle until the last one is left

    ItsGravitational's picture is a white tiger... Tony the Tiger's catch phrase was "They're GRRRRRR-reat!"

    Gravitational / Grave / Gravy... all plays off my opponent's name

    I'm saying I killed my opponent in the ring, I'm the last one standing, I dug his grave, and, as the ultimate sign of disrespect, I skeeted on his corpse before I buried him

    And I did all that in only two lines...
  • ItzGravitation
    ItzGravitation Members Posts: 7,205
    edited April 2011
    dude you cant get on ? but my bisexuality?
    On top of that you talking about my avi?
    nice word association but......
  • ItzGravitation
    ItzGravitation Members Posts: 7,205
    edited April 2011
    This dude say he’s a sniper well then he should try again.
    My avi is a tiger but I’m kin to a leviathan
    Like I said before, track four, I’m the fireman.
    Call me Tony Stark, when I hit you with that ironman.
    You say its no feeding so Its Bleach i'm Soul Reaping
    Better yet soul ? leave your souls ? gaping
    I’m flyer than and higher than a kite, get it right.
    Cant nobody pull my strings, cuz the bird is the word in flight.
    Its me versus you at midnight I got a knife.
    I’m so cold I just throw and it lands where you snipe.
    That’s just a preemptive strike, nothing left to say right.
    Except that I’m bad for your sight don’t aim at light.
    I call you Sniper, why? Cuz you profile say so.
    But you couldn’t snipe a soul if you where playing halo.
    Like call of duty got two uzis hit you with that two piece.
    How the ? you get beet by a fruit you lil groupie
  • sniperk
    sniperk Members Posts: 1,562 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
    sniperk -VS- ItzGravitation
    • Check in by Tuesday, April 5, 2011 11:59 pm Eastern time.
    • Verses are due by Friday, April 7, 2011 11:59 pm Eastern time.
    • Voting will end on Sunday, April 9, 2011 11:59 pm Eastern time.
    Rules
    Mandatory 16 lines.
    Only one round.
    5 votes first wins or most votes wins when voting is over.
    3 votes to 0 votes is a KO.
    50 posts to vote unless you are participating in the tourney.
    All votes MUST be explained well and no crew or hate votes.
    NO FEEDING!!!
    Take criticism like a man. Quit trying to vote sway and explain your bars. If you didn't like the votes you received in the last round, recognize how people vote and write better. Everyone has their own opinion. Use the Predictions/? Talking Thread to voice your opinions, not this battle thread. Lastly, caught biting will disqualify you. Good luck.

    Itzgravitation, you must have missed that NO FEEDING rule because your whole 16 was basically just a rewritten version of mine.

    I could have waited until you dropped first and just flipped around every verse you dropped too... that ? is easy and unoriginal.

    And how you going to act like you haven't dropped 10 threads about your love for Drake?

    I guess I'm Biggie and you're Jay Z paying homage to me by re-using my lines...
    I get it, ? , I get it...
  • ItzGravitation
    ItzGravitation Members Posts: 7,205
    edited April 2011
    sniperk wrote: »
    Itzgravitation, you must have missed that NO FEEDING rule because your whole 16 was basically just a rewritten version of mine.

    I could have waited until you dropped first and just flipped around every verse you dropped too... that ? is easy and unoriginal.

    And how you going to act like you haven't dropped 10 threads about your love for Drake?

    I guess I'm Biggie and you're Jay Z paying homage to me by re-using my lines...
    I get it, ? , I get it...

    ok if t/s says i broke a rule i'll do another verse.
    even tho my ? was way different
    If you can bring up ? i say in threads i can bring up ? you said about me and put my spin on it.
    I dont see anything wrong but i'm not the official
    dude feeling defeated already
  • sniperk
    sniperk Members Posts: 1,562 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
    ok if t/s says i broke a rule i'll do another verse.
    even tho my ? was way different
    If you can bring up ? i say in threads i can bring up ? you said about me and put my spin on it.
    I dont see anything wrong but i'm not the official
    dude feeling defeated already

    How am I feeling defeated?
    My verse was straight ETHER... it had you so shook that you re-wrote your verse...
    it's a BATTLE... I'm supposed to ignore that you're a switch-hitter with a man-crush on Drake?
    I'm starting to think this is more of a popularity contest than about skills...
    I guess I got to UP my post count a couple ba-zillion before I get recognized, right?
  • ItzGravitation
    ItzGravitation Members Posts: 7,205
    edited April 2011
    sniperk wrote: »
    How am I feeling defeated?
    My verse was straight ETHER... it had you so shook that you re-wrote your verse...
    it's a BATTLE... I'm supposed to ignore that you're a switch-hitter with a man-crush on Drake?
    I'm starting to think this is more of a popularity contest than about skills...
    I guess I got to UP my post count a couple ba-zillion before I get recognized, right?

    i dont know what you mean.
    I'm not too popular on the IC.
    but if you say something why cant i respond?
    Do you feel i used your words better?
    Cuz i dont see anyone confirming this.
    I dont want to lose cuz of this
  • sniperk
    sniperk Members Posts: 1,562 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
    i dont know what you mean.
    I'm not too popular on the IC.
    but if you say something why cant i respond?
    Do you feel i used your words better?
    Cuz i dont see anyone confirming this.
    I dont want to lose cuz of this

    In your last round, you were upping for votes with PM's to people.

    But whatever, whatever...

    I never said you didn't have some nice rhymes... your comeback 16 to me was on point.

    Let's end all this back and forth and let the people judge our verses based on what they see.
  • ItzGravitation
    ItzGravitation Members Posts: 7,205
    edited April 2011
    sniperk wrote: »
    In your last round, you were upping for votes with PM's to people.

    But whatever, whatever...

    I never said you didn't have some nice rhymes... your comeback 16 to me was on point.

    Let's end all this back and forth and let the people judge our verses based on what they see.

    i didnt and never will PM ppl for votes.
    If some ppl just like what i post they vote for it.
  • ItzGravitation
    ItzGravitation Members Posts: 7,205
    edited April 2011
    Anyone go tell me if my verse legit?
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
    you broke the rules by feeding but i think you have until midnight to change it so your not feeding
  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited April 2011
    I thought Sniperk's verse was crazy! i'm gonna have to come back and vote this weekend...
  • frozenheartwjlb
    frozenheartwjlb Members Posts: 206
    edited April 2011
    It was feeding man... But yall are acting like some kids man lol. And then Ice caught up that two words did not rhyme.... Smh
  • sniperk
    sniperk Members Posts: 1,562 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
    Young-Ice wrote: »
    to be honest, nobody has explained to the newbs what feeding is.

    cut the guy some slack
    attack

    see, rhymes.
    cadaver.


    not rhymes.

    Let me get this straight...

    Young Ice, you have time to make 200 POSTS (!!!) since I first posted in here but you are TOO TIRED to find time to write a rhyme against Disciplined Insight?

    Man, I knew that that little mulatto...errr MOLE-atto... was a troll... get off your computer and get some sunshine before you are whiter than I am...LOL
  • raw-material_ahh
    raw-material_ahh Members Posts: 555
    edited April 2011
    Things look straight right now. Didn't get a chance to read ItzGravitation's verse prior to the edit. My criticism and vote:

    sniperk
    Last battle I got a bye, now I'm battling bi-sexuals?
    Boom bye bye on this ? , I turn fruits into vegetables
    Good opener. More funny than hard but not bad.
    ? , I'll get extra-terrestrial, his whole style lacks GRAVITATIONAL..pull
    "Escape velocity" from your "black hole", how's that for educational?
    I'm not sure if this is a ? reference or not but the meta is sick but not a hard punch. Just a lot of flash.
    Fig Newton, I'm straight rapin' you, I got this tiger by the tail
    This same STANLEY always CUPping the nuts of a certain half-Jew from Rosedale
    This was okay. Don't understand the Rosedale reference. The Stan line was cool.
    But I have you shook like Jimmy Brooks, your ? style is SIMPlistic
    That wheelchair flow couldn't even sell wolf tickets at the Special Olympics
    Only reason I got this is BC when Drake blew up, it came out he was the wheelchair kid in Degrassi. LOL. Best lines so far.
    Tiger blood? Tigga what? This fake Charlie Sheen should have DQ'ed
    ? snaps? Paula Abdul? Now this Dairy Queen is getting B-B-Q'ed
    Pretty average. Not lame though.
    "Straight Up" you getting "Knocked Out"... ? your checkers, this is checkmate
    I'm Bobby Fischer Against the World, you just a cancelled Czech, mate
    This would've been harder if Bobby Fischer had anything to do with Czech's. But he battled in America and Iceland. Still like it though.
    Or should I say a cancelled cheque, mate? NSF... insufficient flow
    Down for the count, cancel you account, mate and don't post here no mo'
    Pretty basic stuff.
    Cuz Sniper K's a "Survivor", no "Redemption" for Tony the Tiger
    I (eye) dug his GRRRRRRRRRRRRR-ave (grave), and bust "man GRAVY" on his cadaver
    SICK outro. Probably your best lines too of the battle.

    ItzGravitation
    This dude say he’s a sniper well then he should try again.
    My avi is a tiger but I’m kin to a leviathan
    Pretty basic. I like the leviathan idea but there was no punch mixed in with it. 2nd line was kind of a boast. Weak opener.
    Like I said before, track four, I’m the fireman.
    Call me Tony Stark, when I hit you with that ironman.
    Track four? Really like the 2nd line though. SICK.
    You say its no feeding so Its Bleach i'm Soul Reaping
    Better yet soul ? leave your souls ? gaping
    This was okay. Would've like to see a punch mixed in with it though
    I’m flyer than and higher than a kite, get it right.
    Cant nobody pull my strings, cuz the bird is the word in flight.
    1st line is so played. Lol. Probably with these lines are that you aren't battling sniperk really. Boast.
    Its me versus you at midnight I got a knife.
    I’m so cold I just throw and it lands where you snipe.
    Real simple. Doesn't seem like much thought were put into these lines. What's up?? "me vs. you at midnight, i got a knife."?? The wording on the 2nd line seems basic too. I feel like I'm missing something here or you are missing something.
    That’s just a preemptive strike, nothing left to say right.
    Except that I’m bad for your sight don’t aim at light.
    Kind of a boast but didn't really punch hard. It's my understanding that you are trying to say he can't see you but there isn't much more to it.
    I call you Sniper, why? Cuz you profile say so.
    But you couldn’t snipe a soul if you where playing halo.
    Starting to fall off. This was eh.
    Like call of duty got two uzis hit you with that two piece.
    How the ? you get beet by a fruit you lil groupie
    I don't get the 2nd line. You trying to say you're a fruit? Lol. Not cool. You get points for using a meta in this line though.

    Basically, sniperk's verse had some mistakes but also some real sick lines. Decent intro. 3-4 real good lines. All lines were directed at his opponent and battle oriented. Some metas put in there. Punches. Looked like some real work was put into his verse. And ItzGravitation had 1, maybe 2 sick lines but his mistakes were major. Some real simple lines like "Except that I’m bad for your sight don’t aim at light.", "I’m flyer than and higher than a kite, get it right." and "I’m so cold I just throw and it lands where you snipe." to name a few. Would've liked to see more metas or punches put into the verse. My vote is for sniperk. GL to each of you.
  • ItzGravitation
    ItzGravitation Members Posts: 7,205
    edited April 2011
    i think i might lose since i changed my verse.
    No trippin tho
  • ItzGravitation
    ItzGravitation Members Posts: 7,205
    edited April 2011
    Young-Ice wrote: »
    sniperk is breaking rules

    if dude broke rules i demand i get to redo a verse cuz ppl say i was feeding and i had to rush my ? .
  • ItzGravitation
    ItzGravitation Members Posts: 7,205
    edited April 2011
    if dude broke a rule i wwant to redo my verse since i had to rush mine.
    Dont know what feeding is but i;m sure i didnt do it
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
    sniperk wrote: »
    Last battle I got a bye, now I'm battling bi-sexuals? -lots of alliteration
    Boom bye bye on this ? , I turn fruits into vegetables -more alliteration with a nice original punchline
    ? , I'll get extra-terrestrial, his whole style lacks GRAVITATIONAL..pull -not really exta-terrestrial
    "Escape velocity" from your "black hole", how's that for educational?- sounds forced not well developed
    Fig Newton, I'm straight rapin' you, I got this tiger by the tail-makes me laugh
    This same STANLEY always CUPping the nuts of a certain half-Jew from Rosedale-real lyrical but too complex
    But I have you shook like Jimmy Brooks, your ? style is SIMPlistic-i dont get why he capitalized simp but then i never watched drakes show
    That wheelchair flow couldn't even sell wolf tickets at the Special Olympics-this is lyrical and dope
    Tiger blood? Tigga what? This fake Charlie Sheen should have DQ'ed-play on his avi made me laugh
    ? snaps? Paula Abdul? Now this Dairy Queen is getting B-B-Q'ed-hilarious with the dairy queen reference
    "Straight Up" you getting "Knocked Out"... ? your checkers, this is checkmate-i dont understand the quotation marks
    I'm Bobby Fischer Against the World, you just a cancelled Czech, mate- i like the wordplay of checkmate and the methaphor of chess
    Or should I say a cancelled cheque, mate? NSF... insufficient flow -i like the continued checkmate wordplay and it fits as a good diss
    Down for the count, cancel you account, mate and don't post here no mo'-sound like a set up for his strongest line
    Cuz Sniper K's a "Survivor", no "Redemption" for Tony the Tiger
    I (eye) dug his GRRRRRRRRRRRRR-ave (grave), and bust "man GRAVY" on his cadaver-i dont get the eye homonyms but the funny and twisted ending i like

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    i would give this verse a 6
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