? .I.AM. by VSOP *written to Dead Prez-this is life*

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VSOP
VSOP Members Posts: 195 ✭✭
edited September 2010 in Waiting To Exhale
whutcha know about the drink
the passionate sink that drowns my soberness
I am hopelessness
I was the seed
the nightmare that really came when the condom broke
I am peed onto a stick
I am that scream...that SHRIEK!
I am the lecture from the shrink
I am that night revisited
I am that unforgiveness
9 months later and I am that little kid
turning from a baby to a little ?
turning from no common sense to ignorance
I grew slow but got in trouble fast
I am that tumor on grandfather times nads
I am hanging from my family tree's tire swing
I am a king
aching in an iron mask
I am inside my laugh
I am turned inside out
uncomfortable in my own soul
I am that name whispered in Grandmoms' hope
I am that secret that others might not know
I am an inpatient to an asylum
I am a disgrace to my kin
I am my mothers' mental escaped moments keepsake
I am past mistakes
and I cannot get past this fate
I have his face



so his ? defines who I am
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  • Legend24
    Legend24 Members Posts: 689 ✭✭
    edited August 2010
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    This is deep. Never thought about it from this perspective before... good job shedding some light on a different point of view. Usually people just think about what the mother had to go through or how horrible the guy is, but rarely do people mention how the kid feels being the "result" of the abuse.
    I am my mothers' mental escaped moments keepsake
    I am past mistakes
    and I cannot get past this fate
    I have his face

    Those last four bars hit it perfect. Keep up the work bro.
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  • VSOP
    VSOP Members Posts: 195 ✭✭
    edited August 2010
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    Legend24 wrote: »
    This is deep. Never thought about it from this perspective before... good job shedding some light on a different point of view. Usually people just think about what the mother had to go through or how horrible the guy is, but rarely do people mention how the kid feels being the "result" of the abuse.



    Those last four bars hit it perfect. Keep up the work bro.


    appreciate it fam-wasn't really headin in this direction but thats where I was lead for some reason

    I was tryin to write about myself and growin up and when I reread the first 10 or so lines-it jus sounded like a child of ? so I jus went with it

    thanks for the feedback though, always good to see people read and reply in here. I know I need to do more of that myself

    bless
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  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited August 2010
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    Vsop,
    This was pretty deep like how legend said.. Very descriptive in ways I couldnt even imagine and I commend you for sharing with us, I appreciate that..

    And like legend said, the last 4 bars hit hard..

    Thanks again for sharing..


    Peace and blessings fellow poet!
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  • REAL_POETICAL
    REAL_POETICAL Members Posts: 347 ✭✭
    edited August 2010
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    pure uncut excellence flowing through this piece man...you literally created a classic the moment i read the lines:

    I am a king
    aching in an iron mask
    I am inside my laugh
    I am turned inside out
    uncomfortable in my own soul


    ? it every line was crazy...you went deep with this piece....bottom line excellent work

    keep droppin those lines of scriptures that make dreams exist called poetry my fellow poet


    peace
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  • raw-material_ahh
    raw-material_ahh Members Posts: 555 ✭
    edited August 2010
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    9 months later and I am that little kid
    turning from a baby to a little ?

    that was hilarious!
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  • VSOP
    VSOP Members Posts: 195 ✭✭
    edited August 2010
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    REAL_POETICAL wrote: »
    pure uncut excellence flowing through this piece man...you literally created a classic the moment i read the lines:

    I am a king
    aching in an iron mask
    I am inside my laugh
    I am turned inside out
    uncomfortable in my own soul


    ? it every line was crazy...you went deep with this piece....bottom line excellent work

    keep droppin those lines of scriptures that make dreams exist called poetry my fellow poet


    peace

    appreciate it homie

    tryin to keep up with YOU RP! collab time? I got today and tomorrow off-down to ride to a beat and tell a story?
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  • REAL_POETICAL
    REAL_POETICAL Members Posts: 347 ✭✭
    edited August 2010
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    VSOP wrote: »
    appreciate it homie

    tryin to keep up with YOU RP! collab time? I got today and tomorrow off-down to ride to a beat and tell a story?

    hell we could get that collab started now....get at me
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  • VSOP
    VSOP Members Posts: 195 ✭✭
    edited September 2010
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    REAL_POETICAL wrote: »
    hell we could get that collab started now....get at me

    hit you up with a pm-whutcha got in mind? we never did that war piece? or you got somethin else and do you wanna do it over a beat

    jus let me know-if need be we can jus do it in body slam and we'll just tell people its me and you postin in that ? -a RP and VSOP post only or some ? lol
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