Breathe

shawty_stunnagrl
shawty_stunnagrl Members Posts: 38
edited September 2010 in Waiting To Exhale
Time doesnt pass
It sits still and waits
I stand here in the moment
Blank minded in awe
I stare straight ahead
I see only the open road
Vast emptiness
Consumes my soul
Total control of my being
Is lost
A glimpse of what was
Shatters the silence of death
Eyes of the weak open
With gasps im reminded to breathe.


....yea i use to be on here a while back. old sn was "stunnashadesgrl" ...some of yall might remember me. but im reposting this poem to get started back up again. :)

Comments

  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited August 2010
    I never recognized you here, but welcome back!

    I thought this was an interesting topic, I wish you had done more with it, in terms of stretching the poem some more because it was like a hiku..

    I enjoyed reading tho, anything poetic I enjoy reading regardless the lack of substance..

    neways keep writing..


    Peace!
  • shawty_stunnagrl
    shawty_stunnagrl Members Posts: 38
    edited September 2010
    haha yea its been a while since ive been here. and thanx. this poem won me alot. i just never responded intime to the stuff or it would have been published too.
  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited September 2010
    O yea, that's wassup..

    I'll be looking forward to your presence here..

    O, and ur welcome for the feedback too!