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trajik94
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Whats up guys. I actually just registered onto this site so i could figure out what you guys thought of the stuff that I write. I know the production of the songs is very bad, (thats because i did these with a guitar hero mic) but just bear with it please. I'm also only 15 so that might explain the lack of intelligence in the rhymes.
This was one i made for my mom.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Bd0IGoMNq_g
This one i made for fun because i really liked Music Box's beat.
http://www.youtube.com/user/EnterTra.../1/I64o2wfGe18
Also i know i suck at hooks.
If any of you guys can critique me in any way please do so.
This was one i made for my mom.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Bd0IGoMNq_g
This one i made for fun because i really liked Music Box's beat.
http://www.youtube.com/user/EnterTra.../1/I64o2wfGe18
Also i know i suck at hooks.
If any of you guys can critique me in any way please do so.
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The hook could possibly be the first few bars you spit repeated after 4 bars... It wasnt too bad but u sound like ur readin off the paper..U should know it like the back of ur hand so u can focus on how it sounds other than what the words are.