Untitled -L.i.p.

L.I.P.
L.I.P. Members Posts: 366 ✭✭✭
edited November 2010 in Waiting To Exhale
All I'm missin' in this mission are better conditions
I'm gettin' sickened from the skippin' of daily nutrition

Man I'm just itchin' for a few cars to call my own
And I'm just wishin' for a new place to call home

I want a girl who cares less about my clothes and outfit
I want a girl who spells the words she chose to curse you out with

I doubt this, cuz I could care less of guess & polo
my soul and flesh is, more precious than diamonds or gold,

I been fightin my whole life inside of my skull
Now I'm enlightened and I'm strikin' till brightness unfolds

Cuz man im tired of roaches and mice
Okra and rice, broke every night as i scope a new life

I walk outside and i see nothin but these smilin faces
Whatever the time and place is happiness and smiles are raceless

Before i die tryin' to chase it, i wanna breed a seed
And we can breathe peacefully until we seize to be

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  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited November 2010
    You need to post more jawns up in here..

    Im feeling this piece right here.. i can relate in some ways.. inspiring me to write something right now..

    thanks for sharing..

    this line just stood out to me:
    All I'm missin' in this mission are better conditions
    I'm gettin' sickened from the skippin' of daily nutrition
    I doubt this, cuz I could care less of guess & polo
    my soul and flesh is, more precious than diamonds or gold,

    I been fightin my whole life inside of my skull
    Now I'm enlightened and I'm strikin' till brightness unfolds

    Cuz man im tired of roaches and mice
    Okra and rice, broke every night as i scope a new life

    I walk outside and i see nothin but these smilin faces
    Whatever the time and place is happiness and smiles are raceless

    Before i die tryin' to chase it, i wanna breed a seed
    And we can breathe peacefully until we seize to be


    Eff it, this whole piece was on some ill ish.. love it..

    thanks for this..

    It's probably what I needed.

    Somebody gonna have to post a daily poem or summin and it should be you lol.

    Peace!
  • L.I.P.
    L.I.P. Members Posts: 366 ✭✭✭
    edited November 2010
    Np! Glad you enjoyed it. I've been writing for a while and I've got a lot of stuff that I haven't really shown anyone. This part of the site isn't really active but I was just like f it tho lemme post one or two of my joints just to see lol. No doubt, it should be me
  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited November 2010
    Yes! I very much enjoyed this, the second stanza just blew my mind.. cause that's how i be feelin..

    I'm gettin' sickened from the skippin' of daily nutrition


    True true, this forum isn't alive like you mention.. but I keeps it breathing, feel me?

    But I"m glad you decided to drop in on us, a lot of poets just come and go, but very few who keeping it poetical around here, like I ;)

    I'm always reading and commenting so please do drop a daily poem about whatever, I'll be looking forward to that..