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blackrain
blackrain Members, Moderators Posts: 27,269 Regulator
edited October 2010 in Waiting To Exhale
Something I loosely put together a couple nights ago...I'm still working on it

I don't wanna see it but it's reality
So I'm gonna pretend that something else is staring back at me
This catastrophe is drastically umasking me
But this can't be my life this aint it something has to be
Wrong with this picture what's really happening
One long nightmare and I keep coming back again
I can't keep looking at this image repeatedly
And keeping what I know hidden just continues to eat at me/If nothing is done then I feel like I'm lying
But if I tell you then I know that you're dying
Not a metaphor but you don't know bad I wish it was
Took me 25 years to realize how bad I miss your hugs
Now I count every one that I get and every one that I give
Makes me wanna cry when I realize you won't be able to run with my kids
I'm heartbroken but I guess I have no choice but to accept
Just tell me how quick I should adjust to watching someone I love inch closer to death

Comments

  • Legend24
    Legend24 Members Posts: 689 ✭✭
    edited October 2010
    Nice piece... short and effective. Simple to interpret and definitely gets the message across.
    Not a metaphor but you don't know bad I wish it was
    Took me 25 years to realize how bad I miss your hugs

    I enjoyed that line. Not sure if you forgot to put the word "how" in between 'know' and 'bad' or if it was intentional, but it's a solid couple bars regardless. Keep up the good work.
  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited October 2010
    This was nice all the way around!

    Keep doing your thang

    Peace!