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Rocket Kidd
Rocket Kidd Members Posts: 2,212 ✭✭
edited February 2011 in Waiting To Exhale
Rain, what i see you when you appear is very clear,
Everythings either cautious relaxing or shedding tears,

When normally forced to hidin, me i think its exciting,
In my room feeling thunder after you scare me with lightning,

Lost in thought, watching office men run with thier cases,
Splashes from cars, ruining suits hair-do's or even faces,

Gracious, how do people sleep when you come to visit?
Is it? you soothe the pain when certain times doesn't give it?

When it's, your residue on the streets, some people slip,
Probably they don't respect you and you give them a trip,

Its not abnormal, that someone so young, could be obsessed,
With something so natural its unaturally the best,

Or maybe i'm just imagining some things at my age,
I like to play in your puddles and stomp through you in a rage,

Some days i wish i could buy you and take you home in a cage,
And stay together for the resy of my days......



i'll admit i had some help with this one..
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  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited August 2010
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    I love every bit of this Kidd,

    The metaphors and word play was on point! And the words gave me images I could paint! And I have a understanding what your conveying bit imma keep it to myself :D

    Thanks for sharing, and you need to write more often sweetie.. perhaps we could inspire each other :)

    I like the fact that you even admit to getting some help in orchestrating this piece..
    Next time hit me up, unless..its a different circumstance if you catch my drift..

    Peace!
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  • Aquafinafloe
    Aquafinafloe Banned Users Posts: 2,871
    edited August 2010
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    wow you know what is soo crazy about this peice l0l..... is i live in wa sate and that is all we get up in here is rain if someone from up here were to read this they would prob get more isane then what they already are due to RAIN. i enjoyed reading this though it shows the "take the time to breath relax and just enjoy life" point of view...who would have thought something so simple like this could actualy be a mind wonder!..i love to acknowlede nature and the things that people ignore or take for granted...im that kid that "splashes" in the puddles when i am in an excited mood..im the person that "smells" the rain coming and smiles...."no crazy nonsense today"! this was beautiful i look forward to reading more ;)
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  • Sovo_Nah
    Sovo_Nah Members Posts: 2,216 ✭✭
    edited September 2010
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    Nice. I dig it. cool concept.
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  • RuffDraft
    RuffDraft Members, Writer Posts: 4,753 ✭✭✭✭
    edited February 2011
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    Found this whilst searching through google, great post, really like the poem... especially the whole personification of it all... really nice :tu
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