TIME by Darxwell B-)

DarcSkies
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edited March 2011 in Waiting To Exhale
I ripped the hands off my clocks, forever didnt seem different
I made no apologizes and surely wasnt forgiven
With no apologies made, I partook the forbidden
With no beginning or end with time in suspension
I daydreamed of better days, to my past, I paid no attention

With my love I walked barefoot through the garden of Eden
Long since abandoned, we found an apple unbitten
As she picked up the fruit we joined eyes for an instant
We knew love, we knew pain, we knew hate in all its Dimensions

We imagined what we'd know when even the word "when" was no longer a hinderance
I tried to travel to the future to get an answer to this
But "tomorrow" and "later" did not exist
With knowledge in her hand I asked, "answer me this..."
The air, the dirt, you, me, your scent...
if it'll always be here, Why appreciate it?

Unashamed we stood still, saw not a fruit but a gift
Our mouths full of wonder, we bit into it
Forever's a curse, what good is life if you know it cant end?
What good is the light, without romance when it dims?

We rejected forever
We wont live without sin

Lets not change a thing of our time here
No not a minute

Comments

  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited March 2011
    This was just beautifully writen! I sooo enjoyed this Darxwell!

    The word play, the metaphors is just bananas.. Makes me think further out the box, as far as metaphors..

    I feel I can never top this at the moment hehehe.. so many lines just stuck and had me thinking as well.

    But this one hit hard though

    "I ripped the hands off my clocks, forever didnt seem different
    I made no apologizes and surely wasnt forgiven
    With no apologies made, I partook the forbidden
    With no beginning or end with time in suspension
    I daydreamed of better days, to my past, I paid no attention

    With my love I walked barefoot through the garden of Eden
    Long since abandoned, we found an apple unbitten
    As she picked up the fruit we joined eyes for an instant
    We knew love, we knew pain, we knew hate in all its Dimensions

    We imagined what we'd know when even the word "when" was no longer a hinderance
    I tried to travel to the future to get an answer to this
    But "tomorrow" and "later" did not exist
    With knowledge in her hand I asked, "answer me this..."
    The air, the dirt, you, me, your scent...
    if it'll always be here, Why appreciate it? "

    Well done Darxwell, well done..

    *gives round of applause..

    and keep sharing with us right here.. You know I'll be reading and giving feedback. Plus you may inspire the people on writers block lol..

    peace darxwell..