iMpIoDez vs b.c.o.dcru

b.c.o.dcru
b.c.o.dcru Members Posts: 206
edited August 2011 in Lyrical Executions
16 lines.
50 posts to vote. Votes must be explained.
No feeding, no biting, no editing verses after second person has dropped.
5 votes to win. 3-0 KO rule. Whoever has the most votes after 2 weeks wins if neither battler has 5 votes yet.


Due date June first/wedsday

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  • RiGGA
    RiGGA Members Posts: 3,219 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited May 2011
  • RiGGA
    RiGGA Members Posts: 3,219 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited June 2011
    Well seeing how that due date wasn't acheivable, let's say Monday?? (the 6th)
  • b.c.o.dcru
    b.c.o.dcru Members Posts: 206
    edited June 2011
    Darryl has a problem...I'll let it be known, ? it!
    He came to the table treed up, this week he looks dusted
    aniversery commin' verses cru that's early death money, your foundations incomplete continue reading "Spittin for Dummies"
    Neal to a Hierarchy who's proficiant in verbal archery, that flip real ? , don't implodez..we spill ?
    the "riggas" set in as outta this youngn hiphop trickles....illlll
    on da real..chill! wit da firearm banter you Chi, I'm up north jabin ya ? tounge bout ta hit up her southside
    she lies about love in her emails u skim, she makes the illisit-nois at the career acadamy of simeon
    you got the news coolin...them desolate ? had you tickled
    mood switched, loaded ya tool clips, took it out on the N.I.U campus like on each shoulder was two chips
    back home they like..."pimpin went simple, over a ? ?" "heck yeah! Dude flipped."
    big cash on deck! Explodein newb ? ...I dooooos this!
    Rip windpipe from Imp's neck, punch the batery out ya back, lyricly ? u wit raw material five hours straight...yal love dat!
    Ya lame lines I soar above, ya brains splat on charger mud ?
    Laserations and scrapes disfigure ya face..where the simi's and revolvers?
    At any rate...it's a great chance you'll be digraced
    but it's ur rhymes that cause this
  • RiGGA
    RiGGA Members Posts: 3,219 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited June 2011
    I don't know where you found out what schools I went to n ? , I almost thought I was done for....Then I remembered I don't need to do a background check to body ? ? ...


    Okay, so homie did his research….but this phony’s still de-ssert
    I eat you, this free work…Ice cream, my teeth hurt
    Sweet lick like a ? lollipop so talk ? and get ? mollywhopped
    Run wit a crew? Me too, ya man’s see-through cuz now he popped
    His Body stopped n dropped reeking like “peee-uuuu” =[
    Slumped the ? n left his soul to decay’s what we do
    Evil’s beneath you, kind hearted--y’aint built for this
    You reluctantly timid diss while I muzzle the(e) wickedest
    Check the temperatures this heat’ll give ‘em hemorrhages
    And if you runnin wit packs then I got gats that’ll leave ya sacked
    Like behind the line of scrimmages
    See All that work you put into defaming my name’s in vain
    Stay in ya lane to be avoidin the pain, but you stepped out ya boundary
    Devoid of the shame in expressing that lame ?
    Rigga’s bad for ya health so you crippled yaself,
    All I did was snatch ya cane, ?
  • C.Melendez
    C.Melendez Members Posts: 1,250 ✭✭✭
    edited June 2011
    iMpIoDez wrote: »
    I don't know where you found out what schools I went to n ? , I almost thought I was done for....Then I remembered I don't need to do a background check to body ? ? ...


    Okay, so homie did his research….but this phony’s still de-ssert
    I eat you, this free work…Ice cream, my teeth hurt
    Sweet lick like a ? lollipop so talk ? and get ? mollywhopped
    Run wit a crew? Me too, ya man’s see-through cuz now he popped
    His Body stopped n dropped reeking like “peee-uuuu” =[
    Slumped the ? n left his soul to decay’s what we do
    Evil’s beneath you, kind hearted--y’aint built for this
    You reluctantly timid diss while I muzzle the(e) wickedest
    Check the temperatures this heat’ll give ‘em hemorrhages
    And if you runnin wit packs then I got gats that’ll leave ya sacked
    Like behind the line of scrimmages
    See All that work you put into defaming my name’s in vain
    Stay in ya lane to be avoidin the pain, but you stepped out ya boundary
    Devoid of the shame in expressing that lame ?
    Rigga’s bad for ya health so you crippled yaself,
    All I did was snatch ya cane, ?

    you got the news coolin...them desolate ? had you tickled
    mood switched, loaded ya tool clips, took it out on the N.I.U campus like on each shoulder was two chips
    back home they like..."pimpin went simple, over a ? ?" "heck yeah! Dude flipped."
    big cash on deck! Explodein newb ? ...I dooooos this!

    prob the best part of the story formatted diss....haven't seen a storline diss in a minute...pretty tough ?

    Evil’s beneath you, kind hearted--y’aint built for this
    You reluctantly timid diss while I muzzle the(e) wickedest
    Check the temperatures this heat’ll give ‘em hemorrhages
    And if you runnin wit packs then I got gats that’ll leave ya sacked
    Like behind the line of scrimmages

    caught my eye with the multis

    both did good but i was feeling implodez overall verse...but creativity with the storyline while still using slick punches....the illinois one was nice....Imma vote bco
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited June 2011
    damn this is a difficult battle to judge
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited June 2011
    b.c.o.dcru wrote: »
    Darryl has a problem...I'll let it be known, ? it!
    He came to the table treed up, this week he looks dusted -great personal to start off in this couplet
    aniversery commin' verses cru that's early death money, your foundations incomplete continue reading "Spittin for Dummies"-
    Neal to a Hierarchy who's proficiant in verbal archery, that flip real ? , don't implodez..we spill ? -good lyricism line
    the "riggas" set in as outta this youngn hiphop trickles....illlll
    on da real..chill! wit da firearm banter you Chi, I'm up north jabin ya ? tounge bout ta hit up her southside-this is dope good attack
    she lies about love in her emails u skim, she makes the illisit-nois at the career acadamy of simeon-good personal about chicago again and attack about his girl
    you got the news coolin...them desolate ? had you tickled - nice ricochet shot with the wordplay
    mood switched, loaded ya tool clips, took it out on the N.I.U campus like on each shoulder was two chips -nice rhymin multis and attack
    back home they like..."pimpin went simple, over a ? ?" "heck yeah! Dude flipped."
    big cash on deck! Explodein newb ? ...I dooooos this!
    Rip windpipe from Imp's neck, punch the batery out ya back, lyricly ? u wit raw material five hours straight...yal love dat!- the second half of this line is good
    Ya lame lines I soar above, ya brains splat on charger mud ?
    Laserations and scrapes disfigure ya face..where the simi's and revolvers?
    At any rate...it's a great chance you'll be digraced
    but it's ur rhymes that cause this-good ending with the last three lines

    rate:7/10
    this is a good verse alot of personals good name flips and double meanings
    attacked throughout
    rhymed good with a nice flow
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited June 2011
    iMpIoDez wrote: »
    I don't know where you found out what schools I went to n ? , I almost thought I was done for....Then I remembered I don't need to do a background check to body ? ? ...


    Okay, so homie did his research….but this phony’s still de-ssert
    I eat you, this free work…Ice cream, my teeth hurt-nice multis and methaphor in this couplet
    Sweet lick like a ? lollipop so talk ? and get ? mollywhopped-dope worplay and muti with continued methaphor from the last line
    Run wit a crew? Me too, ya man’s see-through cuz now he popped-dope mutis in this couplet and strong attack
    His Body stopped n dropped reeking like “peee-uuuu” =[
    Slumped the ? n left his soul to decay’s what we do
    Evil’s beneath you, kind hearted--y’aint built for this
    You reluctantly timid diss while I muzzle the(e) wickedest-dope wordplay in this couplet
    Check the temperatures this heat’ll give ‘em hemorrhages-clean multi rhyme and wordplay in this line continued from the last two lines
    And if you runnin wit packs then I got gats that’ll leave ya sacked
    Like behind the line of scrimmages-good football methaphor and rhymes in this couplet
    See All that work you put into defaming my name’s in vain
    Stay in ya lane to be avoidin the pain, but you stepped out ya boundary
    Devoid of the shame in expressing that lame ?
    Rigga’s bad for ya health so you crippled yaself,
    All I did was snatch ya cane, ? -good methaphor and wordplay strong ending in the last three bars

    rate: 8/10

    verse has a good delivery and alot of mutis
    some dope methaphors and wordplay
    with some double meanings and attackin all the way thru
    vote:implodez
  • RiGGA
    RiGGA Members Posts: 3,219 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited July 2011
    ayo lets get a tie-break vote so we can chalk this one up in the record books...good luck to bco
  • raw-material_ahh
    raw-material_ahh Members Posts: 555
    edited August 2011
    b.c.o.dcru
    Darryl has a problem...I'll let it be known, ? it!
    He came to the table treed up, this week he looks dusted
    Pretty nice.
    aniversery commin' verses cru that's early death money, your foundations incomplete continue reading "Spittin for Dummies"
    Neal to a Hierarchy who's proficiant in verbal archery, that flip real ? , don't implodez..we spill ?
    Okay first line.
    the "riggas" set in as outta this youngn hiphop trickles....illlll
    on da real..chill! wit da firearm banter you Chi, I'm up north jabin ya ? tounge bout ta hit up her southside
    Sick wordplay.
    she lies about love in her emails u skim, she makes the illisit-nois at the career acadamy of simeon
    you got the news coolin...them desolate ? had you tickled
    Just funny.
    mood switched, loaded ya tool clips, took it out on the N.I.U campus like on each shoulder was two chips
    back home they like..."pimpin went simple, over a ? ?" "heck yeah! Dude flipped."
    Sick multis.
    big cash on deck! Explodein newb ? ...I dooooos this!
    Rip windpipe from Imp's neck, punch the batery out ya back, lyricly ? u wit raw material five hours straight...yal love dat!
    What? Lol.
    Ya lame lines I soar above, ya brains splat on charger mud ?
    Laserations and scrapes disfigure ya face..where the simi's and revolvers?
    Ehh.
    At any rate...it's a great chance you'll be digraced
    but it's ur rhymes that cause this
    Kind of weak closer.

    iMpIoDez
    Okay, so homie did his research….but this phony’s still de-ssert
    I eat you, this free work…Ice cream, my teeth hurt
    Sick multis. Like the connection and wordplay but 2nd line is weak.
    Sweet lick like a ? lollipop so talk ? and get ? mollywhopped
    Run wit a crew? Me too, ya man’s see-through cuz now he popped
    LOL!!
    His Body stopped n dropped reeking like “peee-uuuu” =[
    Slumped the ? n left his soul to decay’s what we do
    Decent.
    Evil’s beneath you, kind hearted--y’aint built for this
    You reluctantly timid diss while I muzzle the(e) wickedest
    I like the connections again. Decent punch.
    Check the temperatures this heat’ll give ‘em hemorrhages
    And if you runnin wit packs then I got gats that’ll leave ya sacked
    Ehh.
    Like behind the line of scrimmages
    See All that work you put into defaming my name’s in vain
    Nice punch on the first line from the previous line.
    Stay in ya lane to be avoidin the pain, but you stepped out ya boundary
    Devoid of the shame in expressing that lame ?
    Rigga’s bad for ya health so you crippled yaself,
    All I did was snatch ya cane, ?
    Nice rhymes. No big punches but creative lines nonetheless.

    Both verses were somewhat above average. I would vote a tie but seeing as it's been 1-1 for awhile and no votes have came in since June 5th, I'm not.
    b.c.o.dcru won on personals but those personals didn't mix in with great punches but they were still good punches. Both battlers had a lot of rhymes too. More than your average verse. Both came with extra rhymes inside their lines. Also, both fell off for me about the last 4-5 lines so it's hard not to call a tie. After reading the verses about 5 times each and going line by line, I have to say one edged it out barely with slightly harder lines. Vote - b.c.o.dcru
  • RiGGA
    RiGGA Members Posts: 3,219 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited August 2011
    I'd like to forfeit this battle and the one with love yal, I told you I aint competing anymore.
  • RiGGA
    RiGGA Members Posts: 3,219 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited August 2011
    Young-Ice wrote: »
    ^ cry baby.

    You're Canadian, your government worships us, and our governments are representative of the general populace. Get on your knees ? .
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