c. melendez vs thedesolateone

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thedesolateone
thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
edited August 2011 in Lyrical Executions
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Mandatory 16 lines.
Only one round.
5 votes first wins or most votes wins when voting is over.
3 votes to 0 votes is a KO.
50 posts to vote unless you are participating in the tourney.
All votes MUST be explained well and no crew or hate votes.
feeding allowed
BITING is an instant DQ.

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  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
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    can see yal love your candy bars...lol your sweet from your feet to your teeth...tee hee
    just my debrief make you ? in your briefs..*wet noise*eeww
    see when i jot a rhyme?*abrubtly* no!.. its too sublime.
    *lyrically nerdy*die days later from the incognito injection of ether..*melendez in his soft voice tryna predict my bars* " ...in my spine?" *my malicious voice*" no! in your eye!"*looks at him like he is a weirdo ** return to my regular voice*
    not afraid of deaththreats? and i aint either
    cause until your last breath ...*excited and loud*you wont know your dead yet !
    picture you*pause and no ? *... your persona isnt you!?
    fear bringin out the ? ! in you
    thought you was ill well im sick of you!
    im turnin you to pigeon food.
    head could gets severed while your drinkin two elevens... with two elevens
    your body wont have your brain in hell! four two seconds
    think about it ...for that time ya cant even yell!
    or spit your light and color bars to the devils*laughs out loud to the thought*
    twan spawn!
    blast you with a shotgun in my longjohns...
    if some cold night ever you return:chk chk.. boom!
    *slow in the voice of malice disgusted at all his avi pics* you in the mirror more than my ? .
    you not a thug just a nerd with weird science practices
  • C.Melendez
    C.Melendez Members Posts: 1,250 ✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
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    yo honestly i wrote sum ? up on a napkin for this ? but its in my jeans pocket.....now i can get what I originally wrote or take some time out to write now....on u des
  • C.Melendez
    C.Melendez Members Posts: 1,250 ✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
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    C.Melendez wrote: »
    yo honestly i wrote sum ? up on a napkin for this ? but its in my jeans pocket.....now i can get what I originally wrote or take some time out to write now....on u des

    ? i'll have my ? monday its easterweekend and i got too many places to be to write something right now
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited April 2011
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    whenever is fine
  • raw-material_ahh
    raw-material_ahh Members Posts: 555
    edited May 2011
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    Should I close this thread? What's up with this battle?
  • C.Melendez
    C.Melendez Members Posts: 1,250 ✭✭✭
    edited May 2011
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    1st i couldn't find the verse i originally wrote then i forgot about it

    I'll do something in the next hour or so just so he don't think he wasted bars
  • C.Melendez
    C.Melendez Members Posts: 1,250 ✭✭✭
    edited May 2011
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    Desolate1 battle vs Melendez? ? i'd be desolate2
    Imma beat his pupils til they fail him like a tough professor would do
    Ive faced badder cats this ? ain't nice to me
    even with his virgen like flow this ? ain't tight too me
    something not right too me about this desolate dude
    so I *crossed* him righteously for stretching the truth
    rap ain't ya calling son find a new day to day
    this lyrical food for thought for you... go ahead and scrape the plate
    u suck with the bic maybe try papermate
    a Fosters to set the mood for me, then i grab the pen and paper Mate
    far from austrailian but i stay hip hopping like a kangaroo
    desolate thinks his rhymes on point mines sharper than a caymans tooth
    its spells trouble for him when the ? melee brew
    yeah its the 11th but Imma bomb him like May Day 2
    my flow signify death for him just like the raven do
    I'll be smiling like Cam Newton while I do him like Rae Carruth

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  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited May 2011
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    good ? bout time, i wrote my bars in about ten minutes anyways just responding to deaththreats and for practice using paraphrases cause i thought he was whining like a ? about you callin him out

    i should of revised it but i didnt think you would respond after all that time
    doesnt matter though let the people vote

    oh and i dont mind wasted bars im just tryna constantly improve on my approach and wordplay i dont believe in wasted bars im tryna hit the ceilling
  • RiGGA
    RiGGA Members Posts: 3,219 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited May 2011
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    Both did a really nice job on the verses.

    thedesolateone was creative with all the side cues and whatnot, but in my opinion it was a tad overdone and too goofy. Definitely some nice rhyming in there though, but I feel you could have came harder on this one.

    favorite bars from td1:
    picture you*pause and no ? *... your persona isnt you!?
    fear bringin out the ? ! in you
    thought you was ill well im sick of you!


    C. Melendez: This ? had nice punches. Even if there was a weak jab in there, it became lost in a flurry of hooks and haymakers. There was definitely filler in there though (such as the "kangaroo/cayman's tooth" lines) which lost you some points.

    favorite bars from CM: Ive faced badder cats this ? ain't nice to me
    even with his virgen like flow this ? ain't tight too me


    My vote is for C. Melendez. It seems almost unfair though because I know td1 could have done better..
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited May 2011
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    good looking out for voting iMpIoDez i respect your opinion thanks for the attention and explanation
    0-1
  • The_Hamburger
    The_Hamburger Members Posts: 136
    edited May 2011
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    im voting for c. mendenz mexican, cause desolate one is a ? and i whooped his ass. what son, you want some ? ?
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited May 2011
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    im voting for c. mendenz mexican, cause desolate one is a ? and i whooped his ass. what son, you want some ? ?

    spit a verse and ill respond
  • C.Melendez
    C.Melendez Members Posts: 1,250 ✭✭✭
    edited May 2011
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    whoever wins wins.......but 4 1 his verse was spit after someone else was ? and he just put some verse in afterwards.......then i responded "years later" lol...... as far as the caymon tooth kangarooo ? ......it was a reference to me drinking austrailian beer "fosters"

    either way like desolae its just battling constantly to keep your mind sharp
  • The_Hamburger
    The_Hamburger Members Posts: 136
    edited May 2011
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    spit a verse and ill respond

    no, i already proved i can beat you. no need to do it again
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited May 2011
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    no, i already proved i can beat you. no need to do it again

    your delusional check the records
  • The_Hamburger
    The_Hamburger Members Posts: 136
    edited May 2011
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    your delusional check the records

    come at me bra, i already murked u once, u ducking me
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited May 2011
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    come at me bra, i already murked u once, u ducking me

    when did you merk me ,post a link or something of this phantom murkin
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited May 2011
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    more votes needed get in while the gettins good!
  • The_Hamburger
    The_Hamburger Members Posts: 136
    edited May 2011
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    when did you merk me ,post a link or something of this phantom murkin

    u white and from boston, so u already lost. quit ducking me brah
  • thedesolateone
    thedesolateone Members Posts: 4,526 ✭✭✭✭
    edited May 2011
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    u white and from boston, so u already lost. quit ducking me brah

    i seen your work in 4 battles and you lost everyone ,2 of them to me so spit or go home slacker
  • love yal
    love yal Members Posts: 1,327
    edited May 2011
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    C. Melendez vs. Thedesolateone was a good match both did great!

    Favorite line from thedesolateone - slow in the voice of malice disgusted at all his avi pics you not a thug just a nerd with weird science practices.

    Favorite lines from C. Melendez- my flow signify death for him just like the raven do, I'' be smiling like Cam Newton while I do him like Rae Carruth.

    My vote:Tie...because both verse showed same strength vocab, rhymes, and good flow! Thanks for letting me vote..both good luck!
  • b.c.o.dcru
    b.c.o.dcru Members Posts: 206
    edited May 2011
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    can see yal love your candy bars...lol your sweet from your feet to your teeth...tee hee
    just my debrief make you ? in your briefs..*wet noise*eeww
    see when i jot a rhyme?*abrubtly* no!.. its too sublime.
    *lyrically nerdy*die days later from the incognito injection of ether..*melendez in his soft voice tryna predict my bars* " ...in my spine?" *my malicious voice*" no! in your eye!"*looks at him like he is a weirdo ** return to my regular voice*
    not afraid of deaththreats? and i aint either
    cause until your last breath ...*excited and loud*you wont know your dead yet !
    picture you*pause and no ? *... your persona isnt you!?
    fear bringin out the ? ! in you
    thought you was ill well im sick of you!
    im turnin you to pigeon food.
    head could gets severed while your drinkin two elevens... with two elevens
    your body wont have your brain in hell! four two seconds
    think about it...Thees are the bars from the verse I thought were very creative
    the shotgun/longjohns line too

    from C...u suck with the bic maybe try papermate
    a Fosters to set the mood for me, then i grab the pen and paper Mate

    vote for thedesolateone..I just wasn't feelin much of C.M. Verse
  • raw-material_ahh
    raw-material_ahh Members Posts: 555
    edited July 2011
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    Each has a vote and loveyal voted a tie so voting is 2-2. I'm going to leave this open a few more days so we can get some votes in. I will vote on this battle later today, maybe tonight.
  • raw-material_ahh
    raw-material_ahh Members Posts: 555
    edited July 2011
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    Cool battle. I could understand why love yal voted a tie.
    Lines I liked from thedesolateone:
    not afraid of deaththreats? and i aint either
    cause until your last breath ...*excited and loud* you wont know your dead yet !
    Lines I liked from C.Melendez:
    Ive faced badder cats this ? ain't nice to me
    even with his virgen like flow this ? ain't tight too me
    I think C.Melendez edged it out with slightly better punches. thedesolateone one had a cool verse where it seems like he tried something new but I feel C.Melendez had more consistently good lines.
  • raw-material_ahh
    raw-material_ahh Members Posts: 555
    edited August 2011
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    C.Melendez up 3-2. Uppin for more votes. I don't want to have to close this one off a tie-breaker from me. It's a close one. Let's try to get at least 2 more votes on this one. I'll close it if no one votes by next Monday.