Scribblings of a Lost Soul.
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I’m not some savior
I’m not whole
I’m sour at the thought of my pasture being destroyed
Toiled in a world of destruction my path is now engulfed
In turmoil; the soil alight with disease
Present ease before a step retrieves
The fears that be, that lay beneath me
I can no longer go on
I can no longer see
I can no longer feel
A moments touch from you is now a moments too much
to ask, to foresee, I am now a dormant passion
A dormant storm trapped in the devils hands
Can’t you see that I cannot bring happiness to thee?
I am a depressed rodent in the depths of sewage
The cheese that I chew has already been regurgitated
The water that I drink has already been contaminated
I am without rising, without passion, without love
I am a cut above the mentally ill
I cannot seek happiness for that I do not dwell
All the wishes I once made have not been promised
Fulfilled or cherished, forgone down the wishing well
I will not see no return, all that love has done for me
Can now be refuted, I do not hold a relationship with love
I do not want you, your protection is never enough
I am the owner of my destiny
I may not dream but I can be free
Free of the pain, tears and sadness
Your emotion love, is lacking in areas
21 Centuries of sadness,
Literature and Shakespeare madness
All for an emotion that can no longer soar
Leaves me wilted and unadorned
French kiss me to the depths of the earth
I no longer wish for rebirth
A walking soulless man
I’ve lost faith in all that I know,
In all that I am.
I’m not whole
I’m sour at the thought of my pasture being destroyed
Toiled in a world of destruction my path is now engulfed
In turmoil; the soil alight with disease
Present ease before a step retrieves
The fears that be, that lay beneath me
I can no longer go on
I can no longer see
I can no longer feel
A moments touch from you is now a moments too much
to ask, to foresee, I am now a dormant passion
A dormant storm trapped in the devils hands
Can’t you see that I cannot bring happiness to thee?
I am a depressed rodent in the depths of sewage
The cheese that I chew has already been regurgitated
The water that I drink has already been contaminated
I am without rising, without passion, without love
I am a cut above the mentally ill
I cannot seek happiness for that I do not dwell
All the wishes I once made have not been promised
Fulfilled or cherished, forgone down the wishing well
I will not see no return, all that love has done for me
Can now be refuted, I do not hold a relationship with love
I do not want you, your protection is never enough
I am the owner of my destiny
I may not dream but I can be free
Free of the pain, tears and sadness
Your emotion love, is lacking in areas
21 Centuries of sadness,
Literature and Shakespeare madness
All for an emotion that can no longer soar
Leaves me wilted and unadorned
French kiss me to the depths of the earth
I no longer wish for rebirth
A walking soulless man
I’ve lost faith in all that I know,
In all that I am.
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Whats up Draft?
Great drop, Definitly has a certain feel to this piece.
I would say a descriptive pain and heartache. Props on the descriptive parts, definitly sucked me into this poem.
I Think the best part was the last part from "i will not see no return...".
Good Looking Man -
stupot0607 wrote: »Whats up Draft?
Great drop, Definitly has a certain feel to this piece.
I would say a descriptive pain and heartache. Props on the descriptive parts, definitly sucked me into this poem.
I Think the best part was the last part from "i will not see no return...".
Good Looking Man
Props on the feedback; it's not a piece I've tried to perfect. In fact, I didn't even look over it. It was more just a venting piece.
Ahhh nothing too serious (lies obviously) will tell you when I finally write back to your email... It's just about how you can put a lot of faith in someone who had your back for a few years, you felt you grew closer and closer to them and eventually partook in a relationship with them. Only, they weren't able to dedicate themselves to it because of their past and lack of faith and so that leads you to feeling the same as they do about love/relationships.
When the next one comes along with all of the faith that you now lack, you kinda wanna turn away from it all because you can't show them the same admiration/care etc. You don't see yourself as they do, even if what they see is a true reflection of you; issues inside can affect your true being.
But yeah, I'll tell you how that all relates to me when i finally respond to your email... Trying to find a spare 5 hours hahaha jokes, I'll get back to you soon. Been away and busy a lot recently. -
Props on the feedback; it's not a piece I've tried to perfect. In fact, I didn't even look over it. It was more just a venting piece.
Ahhh nothing too serious (lies obviously) will tell you when I finally write back to your email... It's just about how you can put a lot of faith in someone who had your back for a few years, you felt you grew closer and closer to them and eventually partook in a relationship with them. Only, they weren't able to dedicate themselves to it because of their past and lack of faith and so that leads you to feeling the same as they do about love/relationships.
When the next one comes along with all of the faith that you now lack, you kinda wanna turn away from it all because you can't show them the same admiration/care etc. You don't see yourself as they do, even if what they see is a true reflection of you; issues inside can affect your true being.
But yeah, I'll tell you how that all relates to me when i finally respond to your email... Trying to find a spare 5 hours hahaha jokes, I'll get back to you soon. Been away and busy a lot recently.
More like 6 or 7 hours .... Theres no rush Draft, i totally forgot about it actually.
Sometimes trying to perfect a poem can destroy the true essence of the poem i find, trying to make it perfect sometimes can ruin it.
Sounds like you been through alot man.......Time to lose yourself in a new hip hop release **Cough** 27th releases ** haha
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stupot0607 wrote: »More like 6 or 7 hours .... Theres no rush Draft, i totally forgot about it actually.
Sometimes trying to perfect a poem can destroy the true essence of the poem i find, trying to make it perfect sometimes can ruin it.
Sounds like you been through alot man.......Time to lose yourself in a new hip hop release **Cough** 27th releases ** haha
Keep ya head up Draft!!
Haha I'm not surprised you forgot think you sent it at the start of summer!
Yeah, that's definitely true… sometimes lines are great in their raw form. But it is hard not to have weakness when a poem is penned in a very short period of time, I find.
haha definitely, my heads already pointing at the 27th, also received four great Japanese releases in the post, including two Michita's, an re: plus and Nujabes first edition Modal Soul!!! So, I'm tied over :tu -
Draft,
this piece was ill! I really enjoyed reading it, but I felt pain, i felt hurt, all of em' emotions in this piece.. I feel for you, i really do!
I thought the last lines were hella ill...
I no longer wish for rebirth
A walking soulless man
I’ve lost faith in all that I know,
In all that I am
those lines, hit hard.. i was there at one point.. i got faith in ya bruh lol..
thanks for sharing with us as always... and your sig, your sig....of the m'effin chain!!! i see ayebody that i listen too! word, apollo brown! that's my dude! Elzhi...ahhhh.. love it! underground is where it's at
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Draft,
this piece was ill! I really enjoyed reading it, but I felt pain, i felt hurt, all of em' emotions in this piece.. I feel for you, i really do!
I thought the last lines were hella ill...
I no longer wish for rebirth
A walking soulless man
I’ve lost faith in all that I know,
In all that I am
those lines, hit hard.. i was there at one point.. i got faith in ya bruh lol..
thanks for sharing with us as always... and your sig, your sig....of the m'effin chain!!! i see ayebody that i listen too! word, apollo brown! that's my dude! Elzhi...ahhhh.. love it! underground is where it's at
Thanks TupacFan :tu Appreciate your feedback as always :tu
Yeah, I liked the ending, tbh I felt the first two verses were weak; but then I liked how the rest of it went... like I say, it's not one of my most polished pieces... just something I wrote in a dark moment lol.
hahahaha you always say this, but I never see you in the m'effin Essence!!! haha you should peep my new playlist in there entitled Japanese Joy Vol. 2, I think you'd really like it :tu -
I am without rising, without passion, without love
I am a cut above the mentally ill
I cannot seek happiness for that I do not dwell
All the wishes I once made have not been promised
Fulfilled or cherished, forgone down the wishing well
these lines had me restart from the beginning jus so I could feel the strength of those lines right there
like ya Avatar...we quest?ove
keep droppin those gems -
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these lines had me restart from the beginning jus so I could feel the strength of those lines right there
like ya Avatar...we quest?ove
keep droppin those gems
Thanks VSOP, this isn't my best piece, in fact I only like what you quoted and a few other lines as well, but it's something that's good to get off your chest and it's unfinished and will stay that way… but at least there's some good lines in there as you say….
Thanks, yeah Quest?ove is a great member of The Roots, but I used him mostly as an iconic figure that represents The Essence of hip hop, his drum patterns are really nice and also the look that he shows really represents music to me; it's something that we breathe daily. So, it represents The Essence where I mod on the I.C. if you like non-commercialised hip hop, you should check it out; particularly the new mix I dropped in there entitled, Japanese Joy Vol. 2 :tu It's great to write to :tu -
Thanks VSOP, this isn't my best piece, in fact I only like what you quoted and a few other lines as well, but it's something that's good to get off your chest and it's unfinished and will stay that way… but at least there's some good lines in there as you say….
Thanks, yeah Quest?ove is a great member of The Roots, but I used him mostly as an iconic figure that represents The Essence of hip hop, his drum patterns are really nice and also the look that he shows really represents music to me; it's something that we breathe daily. So, it represents The Essence where I mod on the I.C. if you like non-commercialised hip hop, you should check it out; particularly the new mix I dropped in there entitled, Japanese Joy Vol. 2 :tu It's great to write to :tu
sometimes ya worst ? is ya best ?
coffee colonic of the soul ya feel me ? lol
Im not even on the comp that much now n days but if you think you got a thread that might interest me...get at me through reply or pm fam
I love the roots, I love outkast, I love cunninlynguists, I grew up on Nine's 9 livez, lost boyz and M.O.P. but I ride out to D'angelo and Erykah badu (lately, phonte and 9th have been in the playlist)
im all in for good music brah, so much I got Outkast tatted on the left arm
I have that A.D.D. though, I dont search through forums...I get familiar with one and I jus stick with it lol a la WTE (they made the Bootleg for me but I havent been there in years) -
sometimes ya worst ? is ya best ?
coffee colonic of the soul ya feel me ? lol
Im not even on the comp that much now n days but if you think you got a thread that might interest me...get at me through reply or pm fam
I love the roots, I love outkast, I love cunninlynguists, I grew up on Nine's 9 livez, lost boyz and M.O.P. but I ride out to D'angelo and Erykah badu (lately, phonte and 9th have been in the playlist)
im all in for good music brah, so much I got Outkast tatted on the left arm
I have that A.D.D. though, I dont search through forums...I get familiar with one and I jus stick with it lol a la WTE (they made the Bootleg for me but I havent been there in years)
Yeah, you been around here for years from what I remember too? Like back in 2003 you were here when I first joined, I'm pretty sure…
It's cool that The Bootleg was made for you and that you have Kast on your arm, I'd like to see that…
You ever been into J-Hip Hop? I love Japanese stuff, they make phenomenal beats to me… beats that are so laid back and melodic that you can listen and write at the same time…
Glad you like The CunninLynguists though, if you click my sig, you're taken to The Essence, check out the stickies there and download my Japanese Joy Vol. 2 mix, I think you'll really like it given that we have similar music tastes, more recently I've been playing the hell out of D'Angelo!
Do you literally have ADD though?
I feel you lol, I struggle to find time to post on forums too; if I wasn't a mod I'd just lurk to be honest, but I do enjoy posting regularly to keep The Essence going and to still have a place to discuss under-the-radar artists, I went to see CunninLynguists this year, great show. -
Thanks TupacFan :tu Appreciate your feedback as always :tu
Yeah, I liked the ending, tbh I felt the first two verses were weak; but then I liked how the rest of it went... like I say, it's not one of my most polished pieces... just something I wrote in a dark moment lol.
hahahaha you always say this, but I never see you in the m'effin Essence!!! haha you should peep my new playlist in there entitled Japanese Joy Vol. 2, I think you'd really like it :tu
Japanese Vol. 2?? im gonna be peeping that thread soon
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Japanese Vol. 2?? im gonna be peeping that thread soon
You checked it out yet?! Come on, check it out lol.
Japanese Joy Vol. 2 -
lol, nat yet! i swear when i log onto the IC, the only spot I visit is here lol.. but I will though, i don't have volumn on this computer smh.
