ItzGravitaion vs Desolateone(Again????)
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ItzGravitation
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Best 2of3 rounds.
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btw i'm taking all challengers
You first or shall i go?
5 points per round.
No edits after your verse has been confirmed for entry.
At least 200 posts to vote.
btw i'm taking all challengers
You first or shall i go?
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you should go first
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You think that you're the one but i'm about to make you desolate.
On this chomp i defecate, i dont even hesitate.
You extra late i'm extra early, you so girly call you Shirley
Bust a ? head if he thinking that he burly.
You are hardly even worthy you cant even wear my jersey.
If you check they way i ball, i be rolling over all
When he read about my challenge he was ? in his draws.
He's a cub and i'm his pa, this is ? pause.
Take a break take a stake into his heart from the start.
This is evil black arts, demon tearing him apart.
Skinning weak rappers alive, like a ? peeling bark.
But i'm feeling like a shark, swallow whole your beating heart.
I'm a animal a cannibal, eat rappers a la carte
I'm the ? excuse my french, you are just a silent ? .
If the first one the worst one i'm thinking you should worry some.
Dont a take too long to drop your verse, hurry and get buried son. -
i start my verse off first off sayin no ?
cause you gayer than nba games in slo-mo
you not swallowing my heart whole seek and youll find
instead put a actual gun in your mouth see if you can ? this nine
doubt you ever won a fight in your miserable life ?
bullets will hit you like itsgravitational cause if i punched you you probably like it
you be in airport restrooms pretending like you gotta ? for hours
a ? thug that go to jail on purpose just cause you love the showers
tell off the surface you ? like a clown
so i know youll love the flowers when you lay in the ground
you a tiger lily how your avi a tiger when you get no stripes
im the source for you to come up but you will only get a magazine and no mics
taking lots of pictures in clothes stole from your sister
sidney starr ass ? eddie longs probably your bishop
you only say pause to bring attention so people can know how ? you are
thats the only part i believe about who you say you are -
Where I'm from Texas, far from pathetic.
My seizure is diabetic cuz you swetter than some Nesquik.
I wreck ? I'm septic, My sickness is epic.
My grammar incorrect but my ? is the bestest.
I warned you dont test this, now i must destroy you.
If you were on a streak this Halo, killjoy dude.
Watch me start a killing spree by you killing you who killing me?
I'm killing all til infinity, immortal cuz my divinity.
Ask your ? if she devoted she on my ? religiously.
You ? you have no dignity, at least you have my sympathy.
I ? the verse with efficiency, efficiently, you differently.
Even at your hardest you could hardly put a dent in me.
Dont hate me cuz i'm handsome and the ? love my swag.
All the ? love a ? , your car note is my bag.
If you aint talking bout money you aint talking bout ? .
You ? i got tommy's that will make your stomach split. -
Itsgravitation is a beast! Wow.. Reading his verses made me appreciate this battle more. I see hunger!! LOL.
So far, itsgravitation ahead.. I give him a 5 out of 5 thus far.. Because his punchlines hit hard, the multi syllabus, its up to par.. Well structured battle.. -
you stole swag from mexicans gotta put two in your stetson
since you a texan call it a lethal injection
call me the son of sam hill cause you can get caught and killed
in a car with your boyfriend while yall neckin
you downsouth makes it easier to ? on all of you southerners
i wreckon i fix your septic section like mario brothers
how you gonna shoot a tommy when you dont have any arms
and after i slit your wrist with a spinning spur like a ninja star
then give your toothless moms calcium from my draws
with all that sugar in your tank you may think everything is sweet
but i got you beat so i will feed you texas tea until you accept defeat
hypochondriac you only think you sick its all in your mind it not real
those pills i prescribed was only placebos how do you feel?
leaving you leakin like an oil spill there will be blood you know the drill
that way you cant say you dont feel so well
make you do more than kneel youll be still at my heels -
How are you guys doing this? Are ya'll spitting one more round and we vote on the winner of each round and whoever wins at least 2/3 of the rounds wins the battle. Or after y'all do one more round, do we vote on this battle as a whole?
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We'll break here after two rounds to see how the votes go.
If a third round is required then we can go.
But voters should vote on each round.
I'm sure i won both these anyway -
Ima really vote. Vote on other battles too!
Round 1
ItzGravitation
I liked the last line kind of. Most of the lines were basic rhyming lacking any good metaphors/punches. One of the few metaphors was "But i'm feeling like a shark, swallow whole your beating heart." but it was forced (swallow whole your beating heart) like Yoda was rapping. The rhyming was very rapid and kept jabbing but good rhyming doesn't make for good lines. I need to see creativity. It was a decent verse nonetheless.
thedesolateone
There were a few weak punches that didn't have enough cleverness to them like "cause you gayer than nba games in slo-mo." A few good lines though. The gun in your mouth/? this nine line and the source/only a magazine & no mics line were really the only two CRAZY lines that had well executed metaphors that punched hard.
Vote - thedesolateone
Round 2
ItzGravitation
I saw a lot of rhyming that really wasn't hitting and I could sense the flow. It might sound good in audio format but doesn't translate well into a text battle when the focus is who can diss who better. This verse seemed more like a freestyle to me than the one in round one.
This was cool Even at your hardest you could hardly put a dent in me.
thedesolateone
Not much to say about this verse. Lost some steam but still very focused. It was pretty lopsided when you really analyze both verses this round.
ItzGravitation had MAJOR flaws this verse.
First off, 5 were boasts that never diss thedesolateone:
Where I'm from Texas, far from pathetic.
I wreck ? I'm septic, My sickness is epic.
My grammar incorrect but my ? is the bestest.
I'm killing all til infinity, immortal cuz my divinity.
Dont hate me cuz i'm handsome and the ? love my swag.
None of these lines were directed at thedesolateone. Basically, it's like a boxer swinging at the referee BC he's not swinging at his opponent.
And then he had some lines that were boasts that he tried to turn into disses at the end but they were weak to me like:
Watch me start a killing spree by you killing you who killing me?
I warned you dont test this, now i must destroy you.
I ? the verse with efficiency, efficiently, you differently.
I mean, yeah, sick rhymes, but where are the disses? Metaphors? Punches?
And then one line was wasted that was neither a boast or diss:
If you aint talking bout money you aint talking bout ? .
So to me, when you think about it, it was like thedesolateone's 16 lines versus about 7-8 lines from ItzGravitation so it didn't really take that much for thedesolateone to win that round BC there wasn't much ItzGravitation could do in 7-8 lines. They would have to be SUPER SICK to overcome the major flaws he had in this round.
Vote - thedesolateone -
i see you raw material but my ? was on point
no weak lines and why dont you like confidence?
to each his own i guess
There was sick wordplay and the killing spree was a halo reference.
The septic line means i'm sick
my thoughts organised his ? random and ? disses. -
ItzGravitation wrote: »i see you raw material but my ? was on point
no weak lines and why dont you like confidence?
to each his own i guess
There was sick wordplay and the killing spree was a halo reference.
The septic line means i'm sick
my thoughts organised his ? random and ? disses.
I don't mean disrespect. It was sick no doubt. I got the Halo and septic lines. But the septic line wasn't a diss. "I wreck ? I'm septic, My sickness is epic." I mean sick rhyming but it wasn't a diss so I couldn't give you points for battling him BC you were just rhyming. And the Halo line "Watch me start a killing spree by you killing you who killing me?" was a typo I think also. Was it supposed to be watch me start a killing spree by killing you who killing me?? Nonetheless, sick rhyming again but talking about starting a killing spree by starting with him and nobody else can ? you doesn't = hard to me. Know what I mean? Just sick rhyming. I know you got serious skills too. No doubt. I could feel it. I sense the confidence too but I need to see metaphors, disses, punches, ? like:
You're already done cuz I'm "aiming dead on" like I grab the dart/
Lucky for you this is text cuz you couldn't "? a beat" if you stabbed my heart/ -
ItzGravitation wrote: »i see you raw material but my ? was on point
no weak lines and why dont you like confidence?
to each his own i guess
There was sick wordplay and the killing spree was a halo reference.
The septic line means i'm sick
my thoughts organised his ? random and ? disses.
stop crying.wah wah.if you ? im gonna use that against you.why you always wanna battle but dont want no one to mention how ? you are?
you called your self ? in your rhymes but its not ok for me?i think its the other way around your ? was mad random -
Round 1
Thedesolateone best lines:
you be in airport restrooms pretending like you gotta ? for hours
a ? thug that go to jail on purpose just cause you love the showers
you a tiger lily how your avi a tiger when you get no stripes
im the source for you to come up but you will only get a magazine and no mics
taking lots of pictures in clothes stole from your sister
sidney starr ass ? eddie longs probably your bishop
you only say pause to bring attention so people can know how ? you are
thats the only part i believe about who you say you are
ItzGravitations best lines:
You think that you're the one but i'm about to make you desolate.
On this chomp i defecate, i dont even hesitate.
But i'm feeling like a shark, swallow whole your beating heart.
I'm a animal a cannibal, eat rappers a la carte
I'm the ? excuse my french, you are just a silent ? .
Lyrics: Tie / Punches: Thedesolateone/ Wordplay: Itz/ Flow: Thedesolateone/ Multis" Itz/ Overall Post: Thedesolateone
Winner Round 1: THE DESOLATONE
NICE BATTLE....THE 2ND ROUND WAS HARD TO GET A WINNER OUT OF HERE..SO TOUGH THAT I HAD TO COPY RAW'S VOTING STYLE FOR THIS ONE
Round 2
ItzGravitation:
Where I'm from Texas, far from pathetic.
My seizure is diabetic cuz you swetter than some Nesquik.
I wreck ? I'm septic, My sickness is epic.
My grammar incorrect but my ? is the bestest.
Nice metaphors, wordplay and flow
I warned you dont test this, now i must destroy you.
If you were on a streak this Halo, killjoy dude.
Watch me start a killing spree by you killing you who killing me?
I'm killing all til infinity, immortal cuz my divinity.
Nice wordplay, flow, and metaphors
Ask your ? if she devoted she on my ? religiously.
You ? you have no dignity, at least you have my sympathy.
I ? the verse with efficiency, efficiently, you differently.
Even at your hardest you could hardly put a dent in me.
AGAIN..Nice wordplay, nice metaphors and flow
Dont hate me cuz i'm handsome and the ? love my swag.
All the ? love a ? , your car note is my bag.
If you aint talking bout money you aint talking bout ? .
You ? i got tommy's that will make your stomach split.
(Okay, just kinda cruised to the finish line)
Thedesolateone:
you stole swag from mexicans gotta put two in your stetson
since you a texan call it a lethal injection
call me the son of sam hill cause you can get caught and killed
in a car with your boyfriend while yall neckin
(Nice flow, wordplay)
you downsouth makes it easier to ? on all of you southerners
i wreckon i fix your septic section like mario brothers
how you gonna shoot a tommy when you dont have any arms
and after i slit your wrist with a spinning spur like a ninja star
(Okay..kinda just rhyming right now)
then give your toothless moms calcium from my draws
with all that sugar in your tank you may think everything is sweet
but i got you beat so i will feed you texas tea until you accept defeat
Nice flow, decent metaphors
hypochondriac you only think you sick its all in your mind it not real
those pills i prescribed was only placebos how do you feel?
leaving you leakin like an oil spill there will be blood you know the drill
that way you cant say you dont feel so well
make you do more than kneel youll be still at my heels
(Nice flow, decent wordplay, kinda cruised to the finish line)
From the point totals after breaking down the full verses in the 2nd rd, Itz had more metaphors, better overall wordplay, and harder punches, both had nice flow
2ND ROUND WINNER: ITZGRAVITATION -
oops...i just read the rules...sorry i dont have enough post to vote on this one
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can we get more votes in?
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I say tie: My judgement comes down to round one vs. Round two. It's simple to me. Round one it's gravitation had more punches, and TDO's first five lines were his best in the punch department. I enjoyed TDO's structure vs gravitations simple flow...so in round one gravitations punches beat TDO's structure due to the fact I wasn't feelin 3 quarters of TDO's verse at all.
Roundr two? Things got worse. Gravitation was just spittin, and TDO started to feed off gravitations first verse. I guess it made it easy to put up some sort of defence. I saw nothing in the two verses that I could even say I liked. This single line got TDO the win for round two: leaving you leaking like an oil spill there will be blood you know the drill...more lines like that from either of you would have made it a better battle for me. Round two goes to TDO. Off that line alone. It's what I enjoyed the most of the last two verses. -
Whoa cool ending...don't take too long, hurry and get buried son...good verseItzGravitation wrote: »You think that you're the one but i'm about to make you desolate.
On this chomp i defecate, i dont even hesitate.
Nice opener, playing with his name
You extra late i'm extra early, you so girly call you Shirley
Bust a ? head if he thinking that he burly.
like rhymes funny and nice line
You are hardly even worthy you cant even wear my jersey.
If you check they way i ball, i be rolling over all
Good persnal with jersey line....nice ending...rolling over all
When he read about my challenge he was ? in his draws.
He's a cub and i'm his pa, this is ? pause.
Whoa..wild line..lol
Take a break take a stake into his heart from the start.
This is evil black arts, demon tearing him apart.
Creative wordplay rhyme skills..
Skinning weak rappers alive, like a ? peeling bark.
But i'm feeling like a shark, swallow whole your beating heart.
Nice bar...shark swallowing your whole beating heart... that's creative
I'm a animal a cannibal, eat rappers a la carte
I'm the ? excuse my french, you are just a silent ?
Alright but funny.
If the first one the worst one i'm thinking you should worry some.
Dont a take too long to drop your verse, hurry and get buried son.
InGravitation:8.0 -
Good ending...thedesolateone wrote: »i start my verse off first off sayin no ?
cause you gayer than nba games in slo-mo
Good opener and rhymes skill like no ? than games in slo-mo..
you not swallowing my heart whole seek and youll find
instead put a actual gun in your mouth see if you can ? this nine
Whoa good comeback...not swallowing my heart...finishing it ending it with a crazy line..
doubt you ever won a fight in your miserable life ?
bullets will hit you like itsgravitational cause if i punched you you probably like it
You guys know each other?..good personal..
you be in airport restrooms pretending like you gotta ? for hours
a ? thug that go to jail on purpose just cause you love the showers
Lol....prending he wants to ? , a ? thug that go to jail like being in showers purpose..that was funny.
tell off the surface you ? like a clown
so i know youll love the flowers when you lay in the ground
Rhymed well good line..
you a tiger lily how your avi a tiger when you get no stripes
im the source for you to come up but you will only get a magazine and no mics
Good personal...about his avi tiger
taking lots of pictures in clothes stole from your sister
sidney starr ass ? eddie longs probably your bishop
Ooh...stole clothes from his sister.. sidney starr as your bishop..lol
you only say pause to bring attention so people can know how ? you are
thats the only part i believe about who you say you are
Thedesolateone: 8.3 for round 1 I vote for Thedesolateone but both did good on there verses. Well on creativity and humor. -
....good ending I enjoyed this verse then your first verse, keep doing a good job.ItzGravitation wrote: »Where I'm from Texas, far from pathetic.
My seizure is diabetic cuz you swetter than some Nesquik.
Nice and smart opener..
I wreck ? I'm septic, My sickness is epic.
My grammar incorrect but my ? is the bestest.
Good rhyme skill...tight bar..
I warned you dont test this, now i must destroy you.
If you were on a streak this Halo, killjoy dude.
Enjoyable line..I warned you..streak this Halo, killjoy dude..mean line.
Watch me start a killing spree by you killing you who killing me?
I'm killing all til infinity, immortal cuz my divinity.
Alright...
Ask your ? if she devoted she on my ? religiously.
You ? you have no dignity, at least you have my sympathy
Wild line...at least you have my sympathy
I ? the verse with efficiency, efficiently, you differently.
Even at your hardest you could hardly put a dent in me.
Slick with the vocab....and..hardest couldn't put a dent in me... cool
Dont hate me cuz i'm handsome and the ? love my swag.
All the ? love a ? , your car note is my bag.
If you aint talking bout money you aint talking bout ? .
You ? i got tommy's that will make your stomach split.
Itzgravitation: 8.5 -
thedesolateone wrote: »you stole swag from mexicans gotta put two in your stetson
since you a texan call it a lethal injection
Lol crazy opener
call me the son of sam hill cause you can get caught and killed
in a car with your boyfriend while yall neckin
Whoa..what a line ..get caught killed in a car with boyfriend neckin..lol
you downsouth makes it easier to ? on all of you southerners
i wreckon i fix your septic section like mario brothers
Slick line..metaphor, nice ending with Mario Brothers...
how you gonna shoot a tommy when you dont have any arms
and after i slit your wrist with a spinning spur like a ninja star
Good slick line ...tommy don't got arm, slit your wrist like ninja star..good line..
then give your toothless moms calcium from my draws
with all that sugar in your tank you may think everything is sweet
Sick line, disrespectful and rude..calcium from the draws to toothless mother, the tank, think everything is sweet, crazy..
but i got you beat so i will feed you texas tea until you accept defeat
hypochondriac you only think you sick its all in your mind it not real
Creative and smart..accept defeat...its all in the mind not real..
those pills i prescribed was only placebos how do you feel?
leaving you leakin like an oil spill there will be blood you know the drill
Creative...like an oil spill..nice line
that way you cant say you dont feel so well
make you do more than kneel youll be still at my heels
Nice ending...shows you put more work on your last verse, came stronger with lines by being slick, rude with strong lines. Both champs did well, very rude and disrespectful to each other..good battle..look forward seeing more matches from..Itzgravitation and Thedesolateone.
Thedesolateone: 8.6 my vote on both round goes to Thedesolateone....no play hating....Itgravitation did really good on both verses, yours was very creative well structure good job..but both was almost a tie, both had strong verse, good luck on your verse, Thanks for letting Love Yal vote...and good luck
Winner-Thedesolateone -
i wanna thank all the voters if you voted against me or not thanks for paying attention.
and good breakdowns from raw material and love yal.just a few more votes and we will go from there -
cant believe this.
Do you ppl know what wordplay is?
My art is flawless.
If he didnt call me ? , dude wouldnt have much besides the oil spill line.
Somebody explain how i stole my swag from mexicans. -
ItzGravitation wrote: »cant believe this.
Do you ppl know what wordplay is?
My art is flawless.
If he didnt call me ? , dude wouldnt have much besides the oil spill line.
Somebody explain how i stole my swag from mexicans.
I understand your fustration. It's hard to acept others opinion when you have faith in yourself
just keep it moving. I thought you won the first round, but your second verse just didn't hit hard as a battle rhyme. It wasn't very direct. That don't mean it was wack. I don't think your hearing anyone out, and you may be taking it a little too personal. -
i'm not.
Disect the second verse for me. -
ItzGravitation wrote: »i'm not.
Disect the second verse for me.
Where I'm from Texas, far from pathetic.
My seizure is diabetic cuz you swetter than some Nesquik.
Okay. That was cool. You sayin he makein you sick with his ? ways
I wreck ? I'm septic, My sickness is epic.
My grammar incorrect but my ? is the bestest.
I warned you dont test this, now i must destroy you.
Here you wasted two lines talkin bout yourself, the one line going at him was kinda weak, and you could have been talking to anyone
If you were on a streak this Halo, killjoy dude.
Watch me start a killing spree by you killing you who killing me?
I'm killing all til infinity, immortal cuz my divinity.
Ask your ? if she devoted she on my ? religiously.
Once again..nice wordplay but, who are adressing? And the last two lines are about you.
You ? you have no dignity, at least you have my sympathy.
I ? the verse with efficiency, efficiently, you differently.
Even at your hardest you could hardly put a dent in me.
Dont hate me cuz i'm handsome and the ? love my swag.
Here every other line is about you, and the lines about TDO are IMO weak
All the ? love a ? , your car note is my bag.
If you aint talking bout money you aint talking bout ? .
Idk about you but, I don't love ? ...unless you talkin bout newports. Then what does "your car note is my bag" mean? Educate me. The next line is pure filler like you had nothing else to hit TDO wit. Money talk has nothing to do with a text battle.
You ? i got tommy's that will make your stomach split.
this last line just is weak in my opinion
His verse wasn't much better but it was better...just my opinion.
Mater of fact everybody else voted the opisite of what I said.
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