Mercury - Indecisive

Mercury89

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TxlOyOU2idA

This is a short diss track I wrote about a friend who's thinking of getting into rap, but "can't decide." I'm hoping this will inspire him, but once I show him it's online it may also cause him to self-injure. Either way I'll let you know. Beat is "Hip Hop Lifestyle" by DJ Nastee. Lyrics below. Let me know what you think. My previous writing hasn't been too metaphor-heavy so that's what I was really working on here.

Feedback is really appreciated and will be returned -- link me to your thread.

Lyrics are at the youtube page.